• Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius

    Here are my three lessons on crafting internal conflict from Story Genius by Lisa Cron. I just finished reading it and Wow! I highly recommend it.

    Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius.

    • “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks our interest and drives the story forward.” (p. 18)
    • Write the “Origin Scene” – the scene in which your protagonist’s misbelief originated– and three Turning Point scenes “where her misbelief was the deciding factor in a decision she made” and which confirms that misbelief as “right.” (p.114)
    • In each scene, what connects that scene to that third rail? What is the “story-specific emotional component to give it meaning and drive it forward?” (p. 247) Why does what happens matter to your protagonist? How is it slowly changing the misbelief?

    Of course, these three lessons are just the tip of the iceberg. Crafting these four scenes made me really focus on my protagonist’s internal conflict and gave me backstory to insert into the novel. It showed me how what’s happening is making her change her “misbelief” and how to tie my scenes more closely to that third rail.

    I started reading Story Genius because I am taking an online class by Linnea Sinclair called “Inside Out: Crafting your Character’s Internal Conflict.” She recommended reading it. This is my second course with Linnea and I highly recommend them: https://www.facebook.com/Linnea-Sinclair-75135631090/. They’re fun and chock full of writing tips for your toolbox. And completely affordable. So much value for your money.

    Now I also have to figure where I am going to input the snippets of backstory that I wrote as part of the Story Genius exercises, without it seeming like a backstory information dump.

    Book Recommendation: Gabriel’s Ghost (RITA winner)

    I also just finished reading Gabriel’s Ghost by Linnea Sinclair (RITA winner, Paranormal Romance) because reading authors is another way to learn the craft. It was my first paranormal romance and it was so good. I highly recommend it, for readers and writers alike. I couldn’t put it down and just bought the next in the series.

    Let’s Talk

    What do you think is a story’s third rail? Do you think it is inner conflict? Have you read Story Genius? And have you read Gabriel’s Ghost? Are there any books you recommend?

  • The Walking Wounded of MUSIC AND LYRICS

    Music and Lyrics Movie Poster

    Alex (Hugh Grant) and Sophie (Drew Barrymore) in the movie MUSIC AND LYRICS are both walking wounded and show how backstory can create wounds or “ghosts” that then haunt the protagonists. SPOILER Alert. Go watch it if you haven’t already. (I love 80’s pop). It has so many funny lines. For more examples of backstory, check out my earlier post Baby Got Backstory. Backstory is what drives the internal conflict preventing two people from getting together.

    In MUSIC AND LYRICS, Alex is a has-been popstar from the 1980’s who has the chance to write a song for the top rock star currently, Cora. Only he can’t write lyrics. He writes melodies. Enter Sophie, who spouts lyrics while watering his plants.

    Sophie’s Wound

    Sophie reveals her “wound” when she thinks she sees her ex-professor and hides. She then sees his book prominently displayed in a bookstore. The protagonist in his book is based on her. And she’s “haunted” by the words he wrote about her: “she was a brilliant mimic . . . but stripped of someone else’s literary clothes, she was a vacant, empty imitation of a writer.”

    Later, Cora agrees to do their song and they are at a restaurant celebrating when Sophie’s ex walks in. Sophie flees. Alex joins her in the bathroom and says, “People wait their whole lives to see an ex when things are going really well. It never happens. You could make relationship history.”

    Sophie confronts her ex-professor.

    And she can’t speak.

    As Alex says, “the few syllables you got out were absolutely devastating.”

    Alex says that the guy is a complete jerk, and she shouldn’t allow him to have this hold on her.

    Alex’s Wound

    What’s Alex’s wound? His childhood friend left their band and chose business over their friendship. And Alex has been stuck in the past ever since.

    When Cora commercializes their song, Sophie argues that they should tell her that it undermines the whole meaning of the song. Alex says, “it’s just business. And I wish everything was that clear.”

    Sophie, hurt that their relationship doesn’t mean more, turns away.

    The Black Moment: The Walking Wounded Emerge

    Their black moment is when they both throw harsh truths at each other. Sophie tells him he’s not willing to fight for what he believes in. He tells her that she is like the woman in the book, she can’t work when she’s not inspired, but life is not a fairytale, and sometimes you just have to slog through. Sophie walks out.

    The Grand Gesture

    She submits the lyrics (“I need inspiration, not just another negotiation.”) He sings a solo he wrote for her, saying he’s sorry and asking her to give him another chance. And he persuades Cora to sing the song he and Sophie write, without the orgasmic sex scene introduction.

    How do they Conquer their Wounds?

    Sophie manages to write her hit single lyrics even when upset, and Alex writes a new song for her and stands up for the right approach for their song.

    Let’s Talk

    Illustration by Stroianadina on Fiverr

    I hope you are doing well. Have you seen MUSIC & LYRICS? What are your favorite lines? What romcoms do you recommend watching?

    My favorite lines are:

    “Love lost, love found, love lost again.”

    “This is starting to sound a little bit like luggage, but good.”

    #

    “My god, I’ve suffered for my art.”

    #

    And of course their exchange about music and lyrics, ending with:

    “But then, as you get to know the person, that’s the lyrics. Their story. Who they are underneath. It’s the combination of the two that makes it magical.”

  • The Family As Antagonist in RomComs

    the Big Sick Movie poster
    THE BIG SICK Movie Poster

    Ok, so we all know that in romantic comedies, the Antagonist is the lover-to-be, but to kick up the conflict, many RomComs use the Family as the Antagonist. That may be in addition to the alternate suitor–or the Bellamy as discussed in previous posts.

    How the Family is the Antagonist in RomComs

    How can the family be the antagonist or contribute to the conflict?

    • The family is opposed to the relationship (for example, for religious reasons in THE BIG SICK)
    • they hate the lover-to-be because of past history (THE BIG SICK)
    • the family is so lovable that the protagonist falls in love with the family and doesn’t want to hurt them by revealing the truth or deceive them any further (see THE PROPOSAL or WHILE YOU WERE SLEEPING)
    • they like the lover-to-be and push the couple together–helpful if it’s enemies-to-lovers (see THE PROPOSAL or even NEVER HAVE I EVER when the mom invites Ben over for dinner)
    • the family is so horrible that it creates sympathy for a character (see Ben in NEVER HAVE I EVER and prior post discussing this)
    • the family is the backstory that propels the internal conflict

    THE BIG SICK – the Family Antagonist

    THE BIG SICK by Amazon Studios

    I highly recommend THE BIG SICK. SPOILERS below. Let’s see how it uses the family as one of the main antagonists. Kumail and Emily meet at a comedy club after his comedy act.

    Kumail’s family is initially the antagonist because they don’t support his marrying anyone outside the Muslim faith. They keep setting him up with Muslim women in order to find him a suitable wife. And they make clear at the dinner table that marrying outside the faith will lead to ostracism.

    But Kumail is falling for Emily. Conflict.

    Emily finds out he hasn’t told his family about her and that he doesn’t see how he can marry her because he doesn’t want to lose his family. They break up.

    The roommates call him to sit with her at the hospital because she is very sick. He has to authorize putting her in a coma to try to save her. So, now Emily is out of the picture. What can the film do?

    Her family arrives at the hospital. And her family becomes the antagonist. The mom HATES him because he broke her daughter’s heart. (The father is not too keen on him either, but he feels bad for him.) And so for the middle of the movie, it’s the relationship between Kumail and her parents which is center stage.

    And then when Emily wakes up, the conflict is back between her and Kumail.

    THE PROPOSAL

    The Proposal Movie Poster
    The Proposal Movie Poster

    I just re-watched THE PROPOSAL and enjoyed it so much. It has so many great one-liners and set-pieces. I highly recommend it.

    Here, the family heightens the stakes–the mom and the grandmother by pushing them together and the father by trying to separate them.

    Sandra Bullock and Ryan Reynolds visit his family in “Alaskaaa” (to imitate how Sandra Bullock says it when she hears that’s where he’s from).

    The mom and the grandmother push to hear how Ryan Reynolds proposed to Sandra Bullock, push for them to kiss and then insist they get married . . . TOMORROW. They also adopt workaholic Sandra Bullock and take her along on various female field trips. They cause Sandra Bullock to have doubts about going through with the fake marriage.

    ALWAYS BE MY MAYBE

    Always be My Maybe movie poster
    ALWAYS BE MY MAYBE movie poster

    In ALWAYS BE MY MAYBE , another one of my favorite movies, Marcus uses his mom’s death and his father being alone as the reason why he has to stay in San Francisco and why he is mired in his current circumstances. And part of Sasha’s journey is to reconcile with her parents, who worked nonstop when she was a kid leaving her to eat dinners alone at home until she was invited over to his family’s house for dinner where his mom taught her how to cook. So, in ALWAYS BE MY MAYBE, the family history is the backstory that propels the internal conflicts of the characters.

    Let’s Talk

    How are you doing? Have you seen any of these movies? What are some of your favorite lines or moments? Are there other movies that you can think of where the family is the antagonist in the romcom?

    Happy Holidays to All! And here’s to a much better 2021!

  • Baby Got Backstory!

    Baby Got Backstory! I’m working on the backstory of my next novel. And I recently read Mia Sosa’s The Worst Best Man and thought she did it brilliantly. As you know, one way to improve at writing craft is to read books in your genre and learn from other authors.

    The Worst Best Man by Mia Sosa

    Backstory fuels internal conflict.

    “Story is about internal struggle, not an external one. It’s about what the protagonist has to learn, to overcome, to deal with internally in order to solve the problem that the external plot poses.”

    Story Genius by Lisa Cron

    Romance Backstory- Why is this absolutely the WRONG guy/gal for your protagonist?

    For a romance backstory, why is this absolutely the wrong guy/gal for your protagonist? That will complicate the plot. That will force the protagonist to deal with his backstory in order to move on and fall for romance interest.

    The Worst Best Man is a great example to read to see how to do backstory and conflict brilliantly. His brother dumped her on her wedding day, he’s the one who told her, and apparently he said something the night before that made his brother call off the wedding. Ouch. He’s the last person she wants to date.

    And he’s in the same boat. He’s always competed with his brother. Here’s Max’s best friend’s advice:

    “Disregard all of it and move on.”

    …[numerous, numerous reasons].

    “Four, you’re trying to escape your brother’s shadow. Pursuing his old girlfriend is exactly the opposite of that.”

    The Worst Best Man at location 1486.

    I also LOVE the relationship between these two best friends.

    Or take another example of backstory leading to conflict well done. In When Adam Met Evie, Evie hates liars and what is Adam doing?

    When Adam Met Evie
    When Adam Met Evie

    He’s lying to Evie. (He has good reasons). But author Giulia Skye sets up that conflict and tension so that you keep reading because you want to know: how is this going to get resolved?

    The Backstory Tease

    Think of Backstory as a tease. Hint at it initially, but don’t tell all. As Marcy Kennedy states in her post on 10 Writing Mistakes that Kill Your First Chapter,

    “Backstory can be hinted at, but it’s normally something you should withhold until later when the reader really wants to know it and it’s pertinent to what’s happening in the present. Why? Backstory, by definition, is over. The reader wants to see your character getting themselves into trouble in the present.”

    10 Writing Mistakes that Kill Your First Chapter by Marcy Kennedy

    Donald Maass writes:

    “Backstory delivered early on crashes down on a story’s momentum like a sumo wrestler falling on his opponent.”

    Donald Maass.

    Mia Sosa also shows how to do backstory. As the story progresses, the reader learns why her heroine is emotionally reserved. Initially, we just learn her belief:

    “We must never let our emotions get the better of us; doing so is either a sign of weakness, one that diminishes our well-earned respect, or a mark of combativeness, which will cause people to say we’re irrational. And as women–women of color, more specifically–we simply can’t afford to be perceived in those terms.”

    The Worst Best Man by Mia Sosa, at Location 468.

    But then there are specific backstory events that created this belief. I’ll let you read the book to see how she does it. Note that she teases with the belief initially and only gives you the full backstory later on. She doesn’t reveal the first backstory scene that cemented this belief until Chapter 15.

    I recommend following the advice in Story Genius to take the time to develop those backstory scenes. Write the “Origin Scene” – the scene in which your protagonist’s misbelief originated– and three Turning Point scenes “where her misbelief was the deciding factor in a decision she made” and which confirms that misbelief as “right.” Story Genius by Lisa Cron at p. 114.

    Also, show how the backstory affects her actions NOW.

    Let’s Talk: Baby Got Backstory!

    Have you read The Worst Best Man? Do you have any advice to share on backstory? Or on creating conflict between your romantic leads?

    Also, my writing teacher Linnea Sinclair has another online writing class for $15 from July 6-30. It’s called “Hook ‘Em Dano: Writing the Grabber Opening Scene.” If you are a writer, I HIGHLY recommend taking her class. She is a fabulous teacher.

  • Tips for Creating the RomCom Protagonist

    Bridget Jones’s Diary

    Here are some tips for (and musings on) creating the RomCom protagonist and a comic character based on my reading and listening to various screenwriting experts. I’m hoping writing this post will help me clarify my thoughts further.

    So, the RomCom protagonist should be:

    • a NonHero/incomplete;
    • likable (my own take) or at least empathatic;
    • have a WANT that is the opposite of what they NEED;
    • complex;
    • obsessed with something – the WANT;
    • funny; and
    • trying very hard to obtain what they want.

    The Non-Hero

    Book Cover of the Comic Hero’s Journey in our guest chair today

    In Steve Kaplan’s The Comic Hero’s Journey, he writes that the comic hero is a nonhero. I highly recommend his book. It’s funny (as you will see from the quotes below). His book shows the difference between the Comic Hero’s journey and Vogler’s The Hero’s Journey:

    “your protagonist, the comic hero, does not have greatness within. Your protagonist is as far from greatness within as is humanly possible, . . . He wants a world of adventure like he wants a hole in the head. “

    The Comic Hero’s Journey by Steve Kaplan, at p.7.

    He writes:

    The whole point of the Normal World is to set up your protagonist for that eventual change. You might think that all you need to do is put your nice, normal hero in a crazy, fucked-up situation and see how it all shakes out. Well, don’t.

    The Comic Hero’s Journey by Steve Kaplan, at p.7.

    Steve Kaplan uses GROUNDHOG DAY as his example. In the original screen play, the protagonist was just a nice guy. But in the re-write, he became an asshole. The comic hero needs to be shaken out of his rut. And if the comic hero is perfect, then why are all these horrible things happening to him? You need a reason for why you’re shaking him/her out of his/her dismal situation (which, by the way, the protagonist thinks is fine). Id. at p.8.

    So, start with a nonhero character living in a problematic ordinary world. But we still need readers/viewers to like our character.

    Billy Mernit’s Tips for Creating a RomCom Protagonist

    Writing the Romantic Comedy in our hot seat

    As I wrote in my previous post, Billy Mernit provides four keys to characterization: “purpose, credibility, empathy and complexity.” Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit at p. 112.

    Protagonists have to have a purpose (a want) and that want for that character has to be credible. So, Mernit gives the example of Dustin Hoffman in TOOTSIE who wants to be a working actor; the film montage shows us that he is a good actor. Protagonists also have to make us feel empathy for them (maybe because they’re being rejected and we’ve all been rejected)); and they have to be complex (more on that below).

    According to Mernit, one way to create empathy is to show the protagonist’s fervent passion to accomplish his goal. If you show a character repeatedly trying to succeed and getting knocked down (comic potential there), but then getting up again, you will not only build empathy for your character, you will have action in your scenes that mix plot and character.

    Likable or Complex or Both?

    You have a choice to make your character likable or complex or both.

    Billy Mernit and Tess Morris in the “You Had Us at Hello” Podcast #4 have a really interesting perspective on this. They note that women characters have been able to be less “likable” lately, if you look at Kristin Wiig in BRIDESMAIDS or the characters in the TV show Girls.

    Frankly, I still want to create a likable, but flawed, complex comic character. because if I don’t like the character, then I am not willing to invest my time reading the book.

    But, in Sushi for Beginners by Marian Keyes, I was impressed that one of her protagonists, Lisa Edwards, is not very likable, and yet I felt empathy for her. How does Keyes create that empathy? Lisa works very hard, sacrificing everything, and instead of getting the promotion she expects, is shipped off to Ireland to start up a new magazine with limited resources. And she is complex. But Keyes also has a likable protagonist in that same book, so that’s another approach, to have two protagonists, one likable and one unlikable. But I digress.

    And most of my favorite RomCom characters are likable: Sally in When Harry Met Sally, Annie Hall, Bridget Jones, etc. Or to look at characters in books: Samantha Sweeting in the Undomestic Goddess, Becky Bloomwood in the Shopaholic series, Melissa Romney-Jones in The Little Lady Agency series. But they are also complex. Sally is optimistic but likes control. Annie Hall is Annie Hall. Samantha Sweeting is a brilliant lawyer, but unable to do any domestic tasks. Becky can’t stop spending, but gives advice on saving money. Melissa who is a “nice girl” in real life, but “add a satin corset, and some serious red lipstick, and I’m Honey Blennerhesket, bootylicious troubleshooter for London’t hapless bachelors and chaps generally in need of a woman’s multitasking mind.” The Little Lady Agency and the Prince, by Hester Browne at p.1. They are all also funny.

    Why Complex?

    But why complex? As Billy Mernit writes,

    “Complex characters who have contradictions and quirks keep us interested as long as they’re credible.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit, at p. 117.

    Robert McKee said in his online webinar on “Building a Character” that characters don’t need to be likable, they need to be “compelling,” which translates to “complicated. “

    Billy Mernit then circles back to wants vs. needs as one of the keys to creating complexity.

    Needs are at the core of a given character’s point of view, and in a story, more often than not, an internal conflict is what drives, and complicates the character’s external conflict. Generally speaking, when we’re tracking a characters’s arc in the story, we’re tracking how confronting and ultimately resolving their inner issue helps that character achieve their exterior goal.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit, at p. 118.

    The internal issue usually comes from the character’s backstory. This backstory fuels the internal conflict of your protagonist and raises the tension.

    Want/Need

    One way to make them complex is to make sure that what they WANT is the opposite of what they NEED. Then you have built in CONFLICT.

    In GROUNDHOG DAY, he wants to be promoted to a bigger news station in a bigger market. What he needs, however, is to form relationships and to be a better person.

    This dovetails with Steve Kaplan’s advice that the initial goal of a comic protagonist is an outer goal that is the WRONG goal, and so the goal changes as the character changes along the character arc. As Kaplan writes,

    “These initial goals are usually selfish and shortsighted and usually not addressing their inner needs.”

    The Comic Hero’s Journey, by Steve Kaplan at p. 10

    As Steve Kaplan writes, Discovered Goals will replace these Initial Goals as the characters transform. So figure out your character’s want and need, and show how their goal changes from the Initial Goal to the Discovered Goal.

    Give Them An Obsession

    Finally, according to McKee, “the comic character is marked by a blind obsession.” Story by Robert McKee, at p. 382. So, in his example, in A FISH CALLED WANDA, Wanda’s obsession is men who speak foreign languages. This leads to that funny scene where Kevin Kline is saying Italian words (“parmigiani . . . ) to her (but doesn’t actually know how to speak Italian), the clip available here.

    In Sophie Kinsella’s Shopaholic series, she is obsessed with shopping. Which leads to all sorts of hysterical complications as well as tension–at least, when I read Shopaholic, I was like, please, please stop shopping!

    Let’s Talk

    What are your thoughts on creating the RomCom protagonist? Who are your favorite romantic comedy protagonists and why?

    And no idea what week it is in lockdown. I feel like I’m living the movie Groundhog Day–the homeschooling version, except that I’m not learning piano or working out (I wish!); I’m just trying to get through each day of homeschooling, cooking and writing.

    Hoping you are all doing as well as can be!

  • Create More Action and Tension in a Manuscript

    I labeled my scenes action vs. dialogue per my earlier post, so now I think I need to create more action and tension in my manuscript.

    How can I add action when my protagonist is sitting in an office? I can’t invent a space ship or aliens attacking her. (Well, I can, but I’d be in another genre.) She accidently staples her fingers?

    So now I’ve added another antagonist who is metaphorically trying to staple my protagonist. Mwuah hah hah.

    I also turned to my craft books for advice.

    Creating More Action and Tension in a MS Per Dwight Swain

    Dwight Swain’s Advice – Add Feeling, Action, Speech

    I read Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, recommended by Linnea Sinclair and I found what I needed to do.
    1) To add tension, you need to show the character’s reaction to an event.
    2) The character reaction is “feeling, action, speech.” (p. 56).

    My character usually talks in reaction, which made me realize I‘ve been leaving out the feeling and the action. I definitely haven’t been using all the “glandular and muscular reactions” (at p. 72). (Am I really supposed to use glandular reactions? That feels so raw.)

    a. What is feeling? Dwight Swain explains:
    “Panic races through you.
    Panic is feeling.
    Like magic, sweat slicks your palms and soaks your armpits and trickles down your spine. . .
    Actions, one and all.” ( at p. 57) (Also very glandular.)

    Or his example:
    “Hi Jill!” he called. “How’s it going?”
    Feeling: A glow of warmth at his friendliness crept through Jill.
    Action: She smiled.
    Speech: “Just fine, thanks,” she said. ( at p. 58)

    He’s not recommending that you always use all three components, but rather add it to your writer’s toolbox.

    Tension – Internal and External Conflict

    And just as I was thinking about this, this on-topic post from https://nybookeditors.com/2019/05/how-to-raise-the-stakes-in-your-novel-and-create-a-gripping-story/ popped up. They suggest adding internal conflict among several other items on the checklist. I recommend reading article and getting the checklist. My protagonist has external and internal conflict, but I haven’t always highlighted the internal conflict.

    As Lisa Cron writes,

    “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks out interest and drives the story forward.”

    Story Genius, by Lisa Cron at p. 18

    End In Disaster

    I also re-read parts of Jack Bickham’s Scene and Structure, another craft book I also highly recommend.

    “Disaster works (moves the story forward) by seeming to move the central figure further back from his goal, leaving him in worse trouble than he was before the scene started.”

    Scene & Structure by Jack Bickham at p. 42.

    What are your thoughts?

    Do you have any advice on how to create more action and tension in a MS? How do you develop your protagonist’s internal conflict? What kind of books do you like to read?

  • More Tips for Addressing “Too Much Dialogue”

    A turned back gives a different feeling than 2 friends facing each other

    Here are some more tips for addressing “too much dialogue” in your MS. You can also check out my previous post on this. And I found very helpful this post showing 8 dialogue problems and how to fix them by Louise Hornby and this post on how to fix common dialogue problems by Kristen Lamb/Alex Limberg. I started blogging because I took Kristen Lamb’s blogging course, so I highly recommend following her blog.

    • Add Beats to Tie Dialogue to Setting and Convey Character
    • Add Setting Filtered through Emotions
    • Add Setting that Conveys Characterization

    Add Beats to Tie Dialogue to Setting and Convey Character

    “Beats are the bits of action interspersed through a scene, such as a character walking to a window or removing his glasses and rubbing his eyes. . . usually they involve physical gestures, although a short passage of interior monologue can also be considered a sort of internal beat.”

    Self-Editing for Writers, by Renni Browne and Dave King, at p. 143.

    So, beats “allow you to vary the pace of your dialogue” and to “tie your dialogue to your setting and character.” Id. at 144-146. I realized that in the initial drafts of my WIP, there would be pages of dialogue without any mention of place. So even just a descriptive sentence about the setting (using smell or taste) helps give the reader the sense of where they are.

    Also, beats are “a powerful way to convey your characters.” Id. at 151. The examples in Self-Editing for Writers (one of my go-to craft books) show you how to do it. They explain that the beats “give a feel for the pauses in the conversation.” Id. at p. 149. Beats can deepen the emotional content. Id. at 157.

    As they state,

    The best way to fine-tune the rhythm of your dialogue, of course, is to read it aloud. Listen for the pauses as you read, and if you find yourself pausing between two consecutive lines, consider inserting a beat at that point.”

    Self-Editing for Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King, at p. 151.

    If it’s a quick repartee, however, don’t add beats, which will be distracting and lessen the tension.

    Add Setting Filtered Through Emotions

    NYC at dusk

    Add setting, but through the character’s view point and emotional state. Is the character happy? Then the descriptions of setting should be upbeat.

    As the writing guru Swain writes, “present[] your material subjectively, as your focal character receives it.” Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain at p. 47. This book is another go-to writing craft book. My teacher Linnea Sinclair recommended it. (It is dry to read, though).

    Add Setting that Conveys Characterization

    “Don’t give the reader a Better Homes and Gardens description of the heroine’s apartment. Tell her that the week’s mail is piled on the kitchen table beside a dying philodendron or that the clothes she picked up from the cleaners last week are still hanging on the treadmill in her bedroom. These are details that characterize as well as create visual images.”

    Writing with Emotion, Tension & Conflict by Cheryl St. John, at p. 125-126.

    Let’s Talk: Do you have more tips for addressing “too much dialogue”?

    So, do you have any tips for addressing too much dialogue?

    I hope you are all doing as well as can be. We visited the beach as a family for our second time out in 6 weeks.

    Fire Island, New York

    We had “snow” (!) last week in New York City, although it melted by the time it hit the ground. Today, the sun is shining. If you go out, most people are wearing masks. I ventured out to the pharmacy, the bank and the post office (this is my first time going into stores since March 13). CVS (the pharmacy) was a bit like the game PacMan where you’d turn to go down an aisle, see a person and then back out to choose a different person-free aisle to go down.

    Anyway, thanks for reading!