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  • Favorite Black Romance Authors

    I want to recommend some of my favorite books by Black romance authors. They are SO GOOD. My earlier post has some of my other favorite books by Black American authors.

    Get a Life, Chloe Brown by Talia Hibbert

    Get a Life, Chloe Brown by Talia Hibbert

    I love the voice of Get a Life, Chloe Brown. Here’s an example:

    “What would my eulogy say?

    This mind-blowing bore had zero friends, hadn’t traveled in a decade despite plenty of opportunities, liked to code on weekends, and never did anything that was scheduled in her planner. Don’t cry for her; she’s in a better place now. Even Heaven can’t be that dull.”

    Get a Life, Chloe Brown by Talia Hibbert at location 85.

    I love Chloe Brown’s dry wit. Red and Chloe are so perfectly paired, filling in each other’s gaps. And he cooks. And I loved the whole family interaction. I can’t wait to read her next book about Dani.

    The Worst Best Man by Mia Sosa

    The Worst Best Man by Mia Sosa

    Highly recommend The Worst Best Man. Max is a sweetheart and Carolina is a kick-ass heroine (literally – I love that Capoeira scene.) It has one of my favorite tropes (the fake dating trope) and the premise promises problems: Carolina is a wedding planner who gets dumped at her wedding by Max’s brother, apparently because of something Max said. If only he could remember what.

    Real Men Knit by Kwana Jackson

    Real Men Knit by Kwana Jackson

    Oh, where to start? Jesse is such a sweet guy, so heartbroken over the loss of his mom and so in love with Kerry. He’s good with kids. He can cook. And yes, knit. And Kerry is funny, caring and strong, someone you’d want as your best friend. Set in Harlem, the book gives a feel for how NYC can also sometimes be a really small town with a lot of community and heart. Where community circles look out for each other.

    I hope Kwana Jackson is going to write a series with how each of the Strong brothers find love. And Val too. She deserves it after Craig. (Her conversation with Kerry about that hook-up was hysterical.)

    The Proposal by Jasmine Guillory

    The Proposal by Jasmine Guillory

    Finally, I also highly recommend The Proposal by Jasmine Guillory. Carlos and Nikole were another great couple. I loved his relationship with his family and her relationship with her friends. I loved the scene where he takes her for tacos (although it made me very hungry) and the scene where they cook together is another winner! Yes, he cooks too. In my WIP, my character is looking for a guy who cooks and I see that I am not alone in this theme 🙂 And Jasmine Guillory’s next book Party of Two is coming out June 23.

    Let’s Talk

    Do you have any favorite books by black romance authors that you recommend? I will add them to the other books I am buying for #blackoutbestsellerlist #blackpublishingpower. Next on my #TBR is The Boyfriend Project by Farrah Rochon, Intercepted by Alexa Martin and Conspiracy in the Capital by B. Ivy Woods. I’m excited!

    I’ve also spent the past days signing petitions, writing letters, donating, reading and listening. And buying more books from Black authors from Black-owned bookstores (the Lit. Bar in the Bronx and Sisters Uptown Bookstore in Harlem). You can also buy books via Bookshop and pick an independent bookstore to support. Black lives matter. They more than matter, as comedian Daniel Che points out in this funny, but poignant and telling routine.

  • More Tips for Addressing “Too Much Dialogue”

    A turned back gives a different feeling than 2 friends facing each other

    Here are some more tips for addressing “too much dialogue” in your MS. You can also check out my previous post on this. And I found very helpful this post showing 8 dialogue problems and how to fix them by Louise Hornby and this post on how to fix common dialogue problems by Kristen Lamb/Alex Limberg. I started blogging because I took Kristen Lamb’s blogging course, so I highly recommend following her blog.

    • Add Beats to Tie Dialogue to Setting and Convey Character
    • Add Setting Filtered through Emotions
    • Add Setting that Conveys Characterization

    Add Beats to Tie Dialogue to Setting and Convey Character

    “Beats are the bits of action interspersed through a scene, such as a character walking to a window or removing his glasses and rubbing his eyes. . . usually they involve physical gestures, although a short passage of interior monologue can also be considered a sort of internal beat.”

    Self-Editing for Writers, by Renni Browne and Dave King, at p. 143.

    So, beats “allow you to vary the pace of your dialogue” and to “tie your dialogue to your setting and character.” Id. at 144-146. I realized that in the initial drafts of my WIP, there would be pages of dialogue without any mention of place. So even just a descriptive sentence about the setting (using smell or taste) helps give the reader the sense of where they are.

    Also, beats are “a powerful way to convey your characters.” Id. at 151. The examples in Self-Editing for Writers (one of my go-to craft books) show you how to do it. They explain that the beats “give a feel for the pauses in the conversation.” Id. at p. 149. Beats can deepen the emotional content. Id. at 157.

    As they state,

    The best way to fine-tune the rhythm of your dialogue, of course, is to read it aloud. Listen for the pauses as you read, and if you find yourself pausing between two consecutive lines, consider inserting a beat at that point.”

    Self-Editing for Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King, at p. 151.

    If it’s a quick repartee, however, don’t add beats, which will be distracting and lessen the tension.

    Add Setting Filtered Through Emotions

    NYC at dusk

    Add setting, but through the character’s view point and emotional state. Is the character happy? Then the descriptions of setting should be upbeat.

    As the writing guru Swain writes, “present[] your material subjectively, as your focal character receives it.” Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain at p. 47. This book is another go-to writing craft book. My teacher Linnea Sinclair recommended it. (It is dry to read, though).

    Add Setting that Conveys Characterization

    “Don’t give the reader a Better Homes and Gardens description of the heroine’s apartment. Tell her that the week’s mail is piled on the kitchen table beside a dying philodendron or that the clothes she picked up from the cleaners last week are still hanging on the treadmill in her bedroom. These are details that characterize as well as create visual images.”

    Writing with Emotion, Tension & Conflict by Cheryl St. John, at p. 125-126.

    Let’s Talk: Do you have more tips for addressing “too much dialogue”?

    So, do you have any tips for addressing too much dialogue?

    I hope you are all doing as well as can be. We visited the beach as a family for our second time out in 6 weeks.

    Fire Island, New York

    We had “snow” (!) last week in New York City, although it melted by the time it hit the ground. Today, the sun is shining. If you go out, most people are wearing masks. I ventured out to the pharmacy, the bank and the post office (this is my first time going into stores since March 13). CVS (the pharmacy) was a bit like the game PacMan where you’d turn to go down an aisle, see a person and then back out to choose a different person-free aisle to go down.

    Anyway, thanks for reading!

  • Tips for Creating the RomCom Protagonist

    Bridget Jones’s Diary

    Here are some tips for (and musings on) creating the RomCom protagonist and a comic character based on my reading and listening to various screenwriting experts. I’m hoping writing this post will help me clarify my thoughts further.

    So, the RomCom protagonist should be:

    • a NonHero/incomplete;
    • likable (my own take) or at least empathatic;
    • have a WANT that is the opposite of what they NEED;
    • complex;
    • obsessed with something – the WANT;
    • funny; and
    • trying very hard to obtain what they want.

    The Non-Hero

    Book Cover of the Comic Hero’s Journey in our guest chair today

    In Steve Kaplan’s The Comic Hero’s Journey, he writes that the comic hero is a nonhero. I highly recommend his book. It’s funny (as you will see from the quotes below). His book shows the difference between the Comic Hero’s journey and Vogler’s The Hero’s Journey:

    “your protagonist, the comic hero, does not have greatness within. Your protagonist is as far from greatness within as is humanly possible, . . . He wants a world of adventure like he wants a hole in the head. “

    The Comic Hero’s Journey by Steve Kaplan, at p.7.

    He writes:

    The whole point of the Normal World is to set up your protagonist for that eventual change. You might think that all you need to do is put your nice, normal hero in a crazy, fucked-up situation and see how it all shakes out. Well, don’t.

    The Comic Hero’s Journey by Steve Kaplan, at p.7.

    Steve Kaplan uses GROUNDHOG DAY as his example. In the original screen play, the protagonist was just a nice guy. But in the re-write, he became an asshole. The comic hero needs to be shaken out of his rut. And if the comic hero is perfect, then why are all these horrible things happening to him? You need a reason for why you’re shaking him/her out of his/her dismal situation (which, by the way, the protagonist thinks is fine). Id. at p.8.

    So, start with a nonhero character living in a problematic ordinary world. But we still need readers/viewers to like our character.

    Billy Mernit’s Tips for Creating a RomCom Protagonist

    Writing the Romantic Comedy in our hot seat

    As I wrote in my previous post, Billy Mernit provides four keys to characterization: “purpose, credibility, empathy and complexity.” Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit at p. 112.

    Protagonists have to have a purpose (a want) and that want for that character has to be credible. So, Mernit gives the example of Dustin Hoffman in TOOTSIE who wants to be a working actor; the film montage shows us that he is a good actor. Protagonists also have to make us feel empathy for them (maybe because they’re being rejected and we’ve all been rejected)); and they have to be complex (more on that below).

    According to Mernit, one way to create empathy is to show the protagonist’s fervent passion to accomplish his goal. If you show a character repeatedly trying to succeed and getting knocked down (comic potential there), but then getting up again, you will not only build empathy for your character, you will have action in your scenes that mix plot and character.

    Likable or Complex or Both?

    You have a choice to make your character likable or complex or both.

    Billy Mernit and Tess Morris in the “You Had Us at Hello” Podcast #4 have a really interesting perspective on this. They note that women characters have been able to be less “likable” lately, if you look at Kristin Wiig in BRIDESMAIDS or the characters in the TV show Girls.

    Frankly, I still want to create a likable, but flawed, complex comic character. because if I don’t like the character, then I am not willing to invest my time reading the book.

    But, in Sushi for Beginners by Marian Keyes, I was impressed that one of her protagonists, Lisa Edwards, is not very likable, and yet I felt empathy for her. How does Keyes create that empathy? Lisa works very hard, sacrificing everything, and instead of getting the promotion she expects, is shipped off to Ireland to start up a new magazine with limited resources. And she is complex. But Keyes also has a likable protagonist in that same book, so that’s another approach, to have two protagonists, one likable and one unlikable. But I digress.

    And most of my favorite RomCom characters are likable: Sally in When Harry Met Sally, Annie Hall, Bridget Jones, etc. Or to look at characters in books: Samantha Sweeting in the Undomestic Goddess, Becky Bloomwood in the Shopaholic series, Melissa Romney-Jones in The Little Lady Agency series. But they are also complex. Sally is optimistic but likes control. Annie Hall is Annie Hall. Samantha Sweeting is a brilliant lawyer, but unable to do any domestic tasks. Becky can’t stop spending, but gives advice on saving money. Melissa who is a “nice girl” in real life, but “add a satin corset, and some serious red lipstick, and I’m Honey Blennerhesket, bootylicious troubleshooter for London’t hapless bachelors and chaps generally in need of a woman’s multitasking mind.” The Little Lady Agency and the Prince, by Hester Browne at p.1. They are all also funny.

    Why Complex?

    But why complex? As Billy Mernit writes,

    “Complex characters who have contradictions and quirks keep us interested as long as they’re credible.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit, at p. 117.

    Robert McKee said in his online webinar on “Building a Character” that characters don’t need to be likable, they need to be “compelling,” which translates to “complicated. “

    Billy Mernit then circles back to wants vs. needs as one of the keys to creating complexity.

    Needs are at the core of a given character’s point of view, and in a story, more often than not, an internal conflict is what drives, and complicates the character’s external conflict. Generally speaking, when we’re tracking a characters’s arc in the story, we’re tracking how confronting and ultimately resolving their inner issue helps that character achieve their exterior goal.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit, at p. 118.

    The internal issue usually comes from the character’s backstory. This backstory fuels the internal conflict of your protagonist and raises the tension.

    Want/Need

    One way to make them complex is to make sure that what they WANT is the opposite of what they NEED. Then you have built in CONFLICT.

    In GROUNDHOG DAY, he wants to be promoted to a bigger news station in a bigger market. What he needs, however, is to form relationships and to be a better person.

    This dovetails with Steve Kaplan’s advice that the initial goal of a comic protagonist is an outer goal that is the WRONG goal, and so the goal changes as the character changes along the character arc. As Kaplan writes,

    “These initial goals are usually selfish and shortsighted and usually not addressing their inner needs.”

    The Comic Hero’s Journey, by Steve Kaplan at p. 10

    As Steve Kaplan writes, Discovered Goals will replace these Initial Goals as the characters transform. So figure out your character’s want and need, and show how their goal changes from the Initial Goal to the Discovered Goal.

    Give Them An Obsession

    Finally, according to McKee, “the comic character is marked by a blind obsession.” Story by Robert McKee, at p. 382. So, in his example, in A FISH CALLED WANDA, Wanda’s obsession is men who speak foreign languages. This leads to that funny scene where Kevin Kline is saying Italian words (“parmigiani . . . ) to her (but doesn’t actually know how to speak Italian), the clip available here.

    In Sophie Kinsella’s Shopaholic series, she is obsessed with shopping. Which leads to all sorts of hysterical complications as well as tension–at least, when I read Shopaholic, I was like, please, please stop shopping!

    Let’s Talk

    What are your thoughts on creating the RomCom protagonist? Who are your favorite romantic comedy protagonists and why?

    And no idea what week it is in lockdown. I feel like I’m living the movie Groundhog Day–the homeschooling version, except that I’m not learning piano or working out (I wish!); I’m just trying to get through each day of homeschooling, cooking and writing.

    Hoping you are all doing as well as can be!

  • Writing the Romantic Comedy

    Writing the Romantic Comedy is in our guest seat today

    If you like watching romantic comedies or are writing a romcom, then Writing the Romantic Comedy by Billy Mernit should be your Go-To Book. It is a lot of fun to read and full of craft advice and knowledge.

    If you like watching romcoms, then it’s like a friendly, witty conversation with the expert, Billy Mernit. He also has a blog. And he lists romantic comedies, so you can find some you may not have seen. I just watched the movie MAN UP (discussed in the book) and it’s BRILLIANT.

    If you are planning on writing a romcom, then it’s like taking a class on how to write one. Here are my three takeaways from his book, but really, you need to read the whole book! The whole book is brilliant and has so many tips for comedy and for writing.

    • Character Chemistry
    • Supporting Characters Create Conflict
    • The Romantic Comedy Plot Beats

    He also added so much great additional stuff in this new updated version, particularly with how to write comedy.

    Character Chemistry

    Billy Mernit lists four keys to characterization: purpose, credibility, empathy and complexity. (Writing the Romantic Comedy, at p. 112). He uses Tootsie as an example to explain each of these concepts. I plan to do a longer post to delve into the comic character.

    Supporting Characters Create Conflict

    One of my main takeaways from Writing the Romantic Comedy was how supporting characters should create conflict for the main character and “force him to confront his issues.” (Id. at 145). My earlier post went into more detail about this.

    The Romantic Comedy Plot Beats

    The new edition of Writing the Romantic Comedy now has 8 beats (the first edition had 7 beats). I have taken two classes that cited these beats (one online class by Alyssa Cole and one class by Fiona Harper at the RNA Conference in Leeds), so I am not the only writer recommending this structure.

    And the RomCom plot beats are:

    • The Chemical Equation: Set-Up (show what is missing in the protagonist)
    • The Meet-Cute Meet: Catalyst
    • A Sexy Complication: Turning Point
    • The Hook: Midpoint (raises the stakes of their relationship)
    • Swivel: Second Turning Point (“stakes reach their highest point as the romantic relationship’s importance jeopardizes the protagonist’s . . . goal” (Id. at p. 198)
    • The Dark Moment: Crisis
    • Climax: a Fight or Flight
    • Joyful Defeat: Resolution

    Billy Mernit shows how these beats work using NOTTING HILL and CRAZY RICH ASIANS as examples. He recommends watching a romantic comedy and finding these beats.

    The Romantic Comedy Beats in The UnDomestic Goddess

    I thought I’d try applying these beats to a novel The Undomestic Goddess by Sophie Kinsella. This is one of my favorite novels, probably because I’m a recovering workaholic lawyer who identifies with the protagonist Samantha (a workaholic lawyer). I love Sophie Kinsella books. Since I am trying to write a romcom, it’s worth studying her books, even if they don’t fit this movie structure exactly. The book is more focused on the protagonist’s journey, so the romance plot is a sub-plot. Again SPOILERS. I highly recommend reading the book if you haven’t already. It’s a very funny book and good for this quarantine period.

    So here are the beats (I think):

    The Set-Up: the Chemical Equation:

    Samantha is a workaholic lawyer trying to make partner and who has no outside life. She has a birthday dinner and her family members cancel on her because of work and so she is just left holding phones talking to her at the table.

    The Meet-Cute (the Catalyst):

    Samantha misses a deadline to register a loan, causing a fifty million loss to her client. and walks out of the law firm in shock. She knocks on the door of a house to procure aspirin and the owner thinks she is from the housekeeper agency. Romance Meet-Cute: As she drinks a glass of her client’s wine, she feels a prickly sensation and meets the gardener of the house, Nathaniel. He says he heard she trained as a Cordon Bleu chef (she said that while she was interviewing for the job), and asks her what kind of vegetables she will want. He is suspicious when she doesn’t know the difference between various types of vegetables.

    First Turning Point:

    She is fired from her law firm and she decides to stay as their housekeeper. Romance Turning Point: She is trying to cook a dinner for the family, when she has no idea how to cook, and panicking as everything is exploding. Nathaniel comes in and confronts her, accusing her of exploiting her employers since she clearly can’t cook. She admits that she is on the run from “a situation” and she can’t cook. Then she saves herself from the cooking disaster (she tells her employers the meal was inedible and not up to her standards so she threw it out because she didn’t have the right equipment) and stays as their housekeeper.

    Midpoint (the Hook):

    Nathaniel’s mom gives Samantha a cooking lesson where she has to experience the flavors; she can’t just take notes. And the atmosphere is relaxed and enjoyable. Romance turning point: They plan a date.

    Second Turning Point (the Swivel):

    Samantha figures out that she was set up to take the fall for that mistake. She didn’t make the mistake. Romance Turning Point: Nathaniel and Samantha start dating. She also finds out that Nathaniel hates lawyers, so she doesn’t tell him teh truth that she is a lawyer. but dating him gets her farther from her goal of returning to law.

    Crisis (the Dark Moment):

    Samantha poses as a cocktail waitress to enter the firm and confront the partner who set her up, but she gets kicked out of the firm. Romance Crisis: she decides to go back to her law firm job. They break up.

    Climax (Fight or Flight):

    Samantha approaches one senior partner and tells him her theory that she was set up. He researches it and she’s right. She is offered a full equity partnership. Romance Fight or Flight: She realizes she doesn’t want to return to her law firm job while on the train with the law firm partners. She turns down the job again and gets out of the train to find a train going back. Then she sees Nathaniel seated on the train to London.

    Resolution

    Samantha and Nathaniel get back together and she realizes can “do anything. Be anyone.”

    Let’s Talk

    Have you read Writing the Romantic Comedy or The UnDomestic Goddess? What did you think?

    On a personal note, we are on Day 25 in our NYC apartment. We are fine, but I cry when I read the news. I am so grateful to all the essential workers and I worry for them. At night, I try to watch or read a romcom to keep my spirits up. And I highly recommend watching Some Good News.

    I hope you are #stayinghome #savinglives #flatteningthecurve.

    And I did learn to use my tiny sewing machine and sew masks! Pretty good for a workaholic lawyer who didn’t know how to sew.

    Thanks for reading.

  • Lessons from #PitMad

    So, so many lessons from #PITMAD.

    It is Madness. I tried to stay away from checking Twitter, but I couldn’t. It was like dating, when you’re waiting for the guy to call. (Which is why I usually ended up calling the guy.)

    First of all, if Kathy at GetABookDeal101 is running her free #pitmad course, then I recommend signing up for that. Definitely watch the videos and do the exercises from Kathy. And I recommend signing up on her website for any free classes etc. She’s an excellent teacher. I learned how to write a Twitter pitch and I think that could be translated into how to write the back cover blurb. Before, I doubted I could write the back cover blurb. So, for that alone, I think it’s worth participating, even if you don’t pitch or don’t get asked to query by an agent. Or if you’re planning to self-publish.

    The next #pitmad is in June, so I definitely recommend trying it out.

    First pitch on twitter for #pitmad
    My first pitch for PARTNER PURSUIT and A HEART! Thank you! And this agent sounds great for me.

    How Kathy’s Course GetABookDeal Works

    You sign up at getabookdeal101.com/twitter. It’s free. Then you get access to the Facebook group where Kathy gives an assignment each day. Each day, she does a live video class with tips (also available as a replay). It started on a Sunday and #pitmad was on Thursday. You post your homework on Facebook and others can comment, and you can comment on theirs, as we all try to improve pitches.

    How #PitMad Works

    Then on Thursday, from 8 a.m. to 8 p.m., you post three different pitches for your book with the hashtag #pitmad as well as any other relevant hashtags allowed. And you check Twitter obsessively to see what’s happening. (This was actually my first tweet.). And retweet other pitches.

    More Lessons from #PitMad

    So one thing Kathy does via her live video classes is show the pitches that succeeded in getting likes. This was so helpful and, at least for me, it really seemed to unlock my brain so I could try different pitches.

    Voice seemed key. Mash-ups were also successful. And spacing seemed to help. She also recommended just doing a scene from your novel, and not pitching the entire synopsis in 240 characters.

    She recommends trying different things each time. This way, you can see what, if anything, gets traction with agents. She showed us how one person tweeted three different pitches: one got one heart from an agent, the second received none, and then the third received hearts from three agents. She chose brilliant examples.

    I had one like from an agent on my first pitch. So happy! I also had someone comment that they’ve done that (leave the coat on the chair and the light on), so I loved that too. And someone else commented that they wanted to read this book. My other pitches were not successful, but it was still fun to try.  And then Kathy also complimented me, which also made me so happy.

    Kathy re-posts my pitch that got a heart in Facebook group showing lessons from #pitmad
    And her Facebook post looks so professional.

    It’s also an amazingly supportive community.  I loved that aspect. Some people wrote that they got 500 followers on Twitter. I didn’t concentrate on that part of it, but next time, I might. This time, I was so busy in RL that I just did the classes, worked on my 3 pitches, and tried to comment on other peoples’ pitches on Facebook. It was also my first time really using Twitter (Kathy also shows you how to set up your Twitter account). If you have a Twitter community, that may help if many people retweet your pitches.

    Lessons from #PitMad in RealTime

    I started with my best pitch at 10 a.m.. Here are my three final pitches:

    Pitch 1. Jacket on back of chair. Check.

    Briefcase in view of open door. Check.

    Time to escape the office, but leave the impression she’s still there Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer is sure she can persuade cute fun-loving neighbor that she can balance it all. #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    At around 2 p.m.:

    Pitch 2: How to Intrigue your cute neighbor. What not to do:

    1. Play a practical joke on him making him laugh

    2. Send him welcoming homemade cookies

    3. Invite him over for a home-cooked meal

    4. Leave date abruptly to go to office when boss calls. #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    At around 6 p.m.:

    Pitch 3: WORKING GIRL x LEAN IN

    Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer must persuade rival colleague to work together so both make partner.

    Sent Feminist Fight club in inter-office mail

    Sent MIRACLE ON 34th STREET

    No Reply. Not surprised. Invite to BusDev lunch. And it’s a yes #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    My original three pitches included pitch #1 above and then these two below. After taking Kathy’s class, I changed them to the above final pitches.

    I did question whether I should use my final pitch #3 or draft pitch #3 below.

    Pitch 2: When a conflict-adverse workaholic bumps into her new neighbor on the street (while checking her work phone), they strike up a flirtation. Even if he is the one, after 7 years of working nonstop to make partner, she has to put that goal first. #A #WF #R #PITMAD

    Pitch 3: Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer is determined to make partner. She’ll “be nice,” even if her nemesis wonders aloud “if she has what it takes.” But when her 24/7 job sabotages her new love, she must figure out what partnership she wants. #A #WF #R #PITMAD (258)

    Let’s Talk

    Which pitch would entice you to read the book? Have you done #PITMAD? What did you think? What lessons did you learn?

  • Developing Supporting Characters

    So, I’m starting my second novel and developing the supporting characters. I’m also about to take my third Linnea Sinclair month-long class, which will be on secondary characters. So excited! I highly recommend signing up now for it. It’s only $30.00. She is an AMAZING teacher (and writer). So, I will have a lot more insights into this at the end of this month (but you have to take her class for those). But for now, here’s where I’m starting from.

    Only dolls would volunteer to be photographed for a “supporting characters” picture–which leads to some other advice I’ve heard: everyone thinks they’re the MC.

    Use Supporting Characters to Create Conflict and Add Dimension

    The best analysis I’ve seen so far on developing your supporting characters is Billy Mernit’s analysis of the TOOTSIE characters in his book, Writing the Romantic Comedy. And if you are writing a romantic comedy or love watching romantic comedies, I HIGHLY recommend reading his book. He has an amazing pictorial representation of the characters.

    “[T]he supporting characters are all in some way reflections of Michael [Michael is the name of the character who becomes Tootsie] and thus force him to confront his issues.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit (2000) at p. 76.

    So, as an example, in my current WIP, if my protagonist is going to be emotionally reserved, then another character has to be very emotional. Supporting characters should conflict and bring out different traits in the MC. Here’s an initial circle representation, based on Mernit’s picture for Tootsie.

    pictorial representation of contrasts/conflicts between characters
    Good luck reading my handwriting! Even I can’t read it sometimes 🙂 But you should get the idea.

    (To be honest, I keep going back and forth on whether she will be emotionally reserved. Emotional might be more fun.) In my first not-yet-published novel, Partner Pursuit, Audrey is a workaholic, while Jake, the love interest, is trying to live life to the fullest.

    Add a Friend

    Unless the person is a lonely introvert, then I suggest adding a friend. I always wonder about characters who don’t seem to have any friends. Also, this gives your protagonist someone to confide in. And then the buddy can give advice. As Billy Mernit says, “Buddies move the story forward.” (at p. 68). For example, in OVERBOARD (2018), it is Eva Longoria, the best friend, who suggests to Anna Faris that she should pretend she is his wife and he can work to pay off what he owes her.

    Assign “Tags” to Supporting Characters

    If you have a lot of supporting characters, and I’m reading late at night, tired, I might get lost and confuse them unless you give them a “tag” or dominant impression so that I remember who this character is. Here’s what writing guru Dwight Swain advises:

    “A tag is a label. You hang tags on story people so that your reader can tell one character from another. An impression, dominant or otherwise, is created by the tags a character bears.”

    Techniques of the Selling Writer, Dwight V. Swain, at p. 226.

    This is something I also need to improve in my writing.

    Let’s Talk

    Who are some of your favorite supporting characters? Why? What advice do you give about supporting characters?

    And let’s talk about the topic on everyone’s minds: I am trying to stock up for the coronavirus, but it’s practically impossible. The food seems to be eaten as soon as it comes in. It’s like the opposite of doing laundry–I empty the hamper and do the laundry and yet, it’s full again of dirty clothes. Here, I load up the refrigerator and the cabinets, and yet they’re empty. The only thing I can safely say is that we seem to have enough toilet paper. Hurray for that.

    Wishing everyone a great weekend. Keep washing your hands.

  • Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius

    Here are my three lessons on crafting internal conflict from Story Genius by Lisa Cron. I just finished reading it and Wow! I highly recommend it.

    Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius.

    • “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks our interest and drives the story forward.” (p. 18)
    • Write the “Origin Scene” – the scene in which your protagonist’s misbelief originated– and three Turning Point scenes “where her misbelief was the deciding factor in a decision she made” and which confirms that misbelief as “right.” (p.114)
    • In each scene, what connects that scene to that third rail? What is the “story-specific emotional component to give it meaning and drive it forward?” (p. 247) Why does what happens matter to your protagonist? How is it slowly changing the misbelief?

    Of course, these three lessons are just the tip of the iceberg. Crafting these four scenes made me really focus on my protagonist’s internal conflict and gave me backstory to insert into the novel. It showed me how what’s happening is making her change her “misbelief” and how to tie my scenes more closely to that third rail.

    I started reading Story Genius because I am taking an online class by Linnea Sinclair called “Inside Out: Crafting your Character’s Internal Conflict.” She recommended reading it. This is my second course with Linnea and I highly recommend them: https://www.facebook.com/Linnea-Sinclair-75135631090/. They’re fun and chock full of writing tips for your toolbox. And completely affordable. So much value for your money.

    Now I also have to figure where I am going to input the snippets of backstory that I wrote as part of the Story Genius exercises, without it seeming like a backstory information dump.

    Book Recommendation: Gabriel’s Ghost (RITA winner)

    I also just finished reading Gabriel’s Ghost by Linnea Sinclair (RITA winner, Paranormal Romance) because reading authors is another way to learn the craft. It was my first paranormal romance and it was so good. I highly recommend it, for readers and writers alike. I couldn’t put it down and just bought the next in the series.

    Let’s Talk

    What do you think is a story’s third rail? Do you think it is inner conflict? Have you read Story Genius? And have you read Gabriel’s Ghost? Are there any books you recommend?

  • Three Lessons from The Writing Life

    In the Algonkian novel writing course, which I highly recommend, we had to write book reports and list lessons from each craft book we read, so here are my three lessons from The Writing Life by Annie Dillard:

    • Keep a Journal
    • Put your Good Stuff in Now
    • Writing is Hard.

    I found compelling her advice to put your good stuff in now. And look how she writes it!

    “One of the things I know about writing is this: spend it all, shoot it, play it, lose it, all, right away, every time. Do not hoard what seems good for a later place in the book or for another book; give it, give it all, give it now. The impulse to save something good for a better place later is the signal to spend it now. Something more will arise for later, something better. These things fill from behind, from beneath, like well water. Similarly, the impulse to keep to yourself what you have learned is not only shameful, it is destructive. Anything you do not give freely and abundantly becomes lost to you. You open your safe and find ashes.” 

    The Writing Life by Annie Dillard

    But I will note that if my good stuff doesn’t work in my current manuscript and I have to cut that scene, then I am saving it with the hope that maybe it will fit another manuscript better. And hoping that it doesn’t turn to ashes.

    Kind of similar to giving a cat a bath

    The book also helped me as a writer because it showed me how intense writing can be. I read this in the beginning of the Algonkian novel writing course and then returned it to the library, but what I recall most vividly is her description of flying in the plane with the stunt pilot (and her description of her writing room without any comforts). Her writing is brilliant, but she was also a bit intimidating about the writing process. I actually really enjoy writing.

    Why Three Lessons from The Writing Life by Annie Dillard?

    I like limiting it to three lessons because I find that more manageable, although of course, so many lessons and tips can be learned from each craft book. I also think that different lessons will occur upon re-reading a craft book.

    So, as I read writing craft books, I hope to continue this practice of identifying three lessons learned.

    Thoughts on the Algonkian Novel Writing Course

    As far as the Algonkian novel writing course, I highly highly recommend it, although it is only if you are highly self-motivated to complete it by yourself because it is intense, but there’s no feedback until the end. I learned so much, though, and found the lessons invaluable. Also, for me, it was great that I could complete it at my own pace.

    Questions?

    Have you read The Writing Life? What were your three lessons? What are your thoughts on keeping a journal? If you are a writer, do you sometimes save your good stuff or do you try to use it all in the current WIP?

  • Create More Action and Tension in a Manuscript

    I labeled my scenes action vs. dialogue per my earlier post, so now I think I need to create more action and tension in my manuscript.

    How can I add action when my protagonist is sitting in an office? I can’t invent a space ship or aliens attacking her. (Well, I can, but I’d be in another genre.) She accidently staples her fingers?

    So now I’ve added another antagonist who is metaphorically trying to staple my protagonist. Mwuah hah hah.

    I also turned to my craft books for advice.

    Creating More Action and Tension in a MS Per Dwight Swain

    Dwight Swain’s Advice – Add Feeling, Action, Speech

    I read Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, recommended by Linnea Sinclair and I found what I needed to do.
    1) To add tension, you need to show the character’s reaction to an event.
    2) The character reaction is “feeling, action, speech.” (p. 56).

    My character usually talks in reaction, which made me realize I‘ve been leaving out the feeling and the action. I definitely haven’t been using all the “glandular and muscular reactions” (at p. 72). (Am I really supposed to use glandular reactions? That feels so raw.)

    a. What is feeling? Dwight Swain explains:
    “Panic races through you.
    Panic is feeling.
    Like magic, sweat slicks your palms and soaks your armpits and trickles down your spine. . .
    Actions, one and all.” ( at p. 57) (Also very glandular.)

    Or his example:
    “Hi Jill!” he called. “How’s it going?”
    Feeling: A glow of warmth at his friendliness crept through Jill.
    Action: She smiled.
    Speech: “Just fine, thanks,” she said. ( at p. 58)

    He’s not recommending that you always use all three components, but rather add it to your writer’s toolbox.

    Tension – Internal and External Conflict

    And just as I was thinking about this, this on-topic post from https://nybookeditors.com/2019/05/how-to-raise-the-stakes-in-your-novel-and-create-a-gripping-story/ popped up. They suggest adding internal conflict among several other items on the checklist. I recommend reading article and getting the checklist. My protagonist has external and internal conflict, but I haven’t always highlighted the internal conflict.

    As Lisa Cron writes,

    “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks out interest and drives the story forward.”

    Story Genius, by Lisa Cron at p. 18

    End In Disaster

    I also re-read parts of Jack Bickham’s Scene and Structure, another craft book I also highly recommend.

    “Disaster works (moves the story forward) by seeming to move the central figure further back from his goal, leaving him in worse trouble than he was before the scene started.”

    Scene & Structure by Jack Bickham at p. 42.

    What are your thoughts?

    Do you have any advice on how to create more action and tension in a MS? How do you develop your protagonist’s internal conflict? What kind of books do you like to read?

  • Can there be too much dialogue in a manuscript?

    Two Friends Talking

    Can there be too much dialogue in a manuscript?

    According to some, yes.

    Robert McKee’s Advice on Film Dialogue

    I was taken aback by McKee’s advice: “The best advice for writing film dialogue is don’t. Never write a line of dialogue when you can create a visual expression.”

    As he explains in Story, “But if you write for the eye when the dialogue comes, as it must, it sparks interest because the audience is hungry for it.” (Story, p. 393). Of course this is for film, and that’s different from a novel, but I still like the notion of the audience or reader being hungry for the dialogue.

    I love writing dialogue. I also like to read dialogue. I read that much faster than long paragraphs of description. And of course, the above advice is for film. So does it also apply when writing a novel?

    Studying the Techniques of Other Writers in My Genre

    Book Cover of Evvie Drake Starts Over

    I can see that Evvie Drake Starts Over by Linda Holmes has less dialogue than my MS. Some conversations are expressed via paragraphs like this one:

    “When it got to the late afternoon, Evvie poured bourbon and made snacks, and they sat on the love seat with their feet on the coffee table and listened to the new episode of the true-crime podcast they’d both been following. Dean rolled his eyes and complained that the people were clearly never going to solve the case, and Evvie passed him a peanut butter cracker and said it was about the journey.”

    Evvie Drake Starts Over by Linda Holmes at p. 280

    So I ‘m going to review my MS and see what I can re-write in this manner.

    And I’m in the middle of reading Star-Crossed by Minnie Darke (and I’m really enjoying it) and studying her technique.

    Book cover of Star-Crossed

    And here’s a conversation that you definitely don’t want to hear in detail, which is the author’s point, as neither does her character Tara. Lol.

    “Tara introduced herself to the silver-haired gentleman beside her, and before long was engaged in a conversation about an unpleasant-sounding bovine condition called campylobacter.”

    Star-Crossed by Minnie Darke at p. 70.

    What is My Dialogue Doing?

    As you’ve undoubtedly read, conversations have to move the plot forward or reveal something about the characters. See https://nybookeditors.com/2017/05/your-guide-to-writing-better-dialogue/. And I realized that some of my scenes were just fun banter. But can I keep some of that if it is humorous? I think they did reveal something of my protagonist, so I kept some of it, but shortened it.

    The Well-Storied blog gives this great advice to “identify the tension at the core of the scene” and craft related dialogue. That’s just one of 19 good tips at https://www.well-storied.com/blog/write-better-dialogue.

    And I also found this blog post from Ride the Pen very helpful about using body language tags to express emotion and convey conflict and character. See https://www.ridethepen.com/body-language-in-dialogue/ .

    Adding Action

    I also found this advice very helpful from The Editors Blog: “If characters only talk, if they don’t respond to the conflict with action, then that conflict isn’t accomplishing as much as it could. ” https://theeditorsblog.net/2011/10/25/dialogue-my-characters-talk-too-much/

    All of the above blog posts are great resources, so I suggest reading them in full.

    Three Take-Aways

    1. Review dialogue in MS and see if it is moving the plot forward or revealing something about my characters. (Or if it’s funny, in which case I also want to keep it.)
    2. Label my scenes as action vs. talking. See if I need to add more action. (Probably.)
    3. In talking scenes, check if the description can be enhanced such that it creates a “visual expression” (possibly via body language).

    What’s your preference when reading? Can you share any advice about writing dialogue?