• Lessons from #PitMad

    So, so many lessons from #PITMAD.

    It is Madness. I tried to stay away from checking Twitter, but I couldn’t. It was like dating, when you’re waiting for the guy to call. (Which is why I usually ended up calling the guy.)

    First of all, if Kathy at GetABookDeal101 is running her free #pitmad course, then I recommend signing up for that. Definitely watch the videos and do the exercises from Kathy. And I recommend signing up on her website for any free classes etc. She’s an excellent teacher. I learned how to write a Twitter pitch and I think that could be translated into how to write the back cover blurb. Before, I doubted I could write the back cover blurb. So, for that alone, I think it’s worth participating, even if you don’t pitch or don’t get asked to query by an agent. Or if you’re planning to self-publish.

    The next #pitmad is in June, so I definitely recommend trying it out.

    First pitch on twitter for #pitmad
    My first pitch for PARTNER PURSUIT and A HEART! Thank you! And this agent sounds great for me.

    How Kathy’s Course GetABookDeal Works

    You sign up at getabookdeal101.com/twitter. It’s free. Then you get access to the Facebook group where Kathy gives an assignment each day. Each day, she does a live video class with tips (also available as a replay). It started on a Sunday and #pitmad was on Thursday. You post your homework on Facebook and others can comment, and you can comment on theirs, as we all try to improve pitches.

    How #PitMad Works

    Then on Thursday, from 8 a.m. to 8 p.m., you post three different pitches for your book with the hashtag #pitmad as well as any other relevant hashtags allowed. And you check Twitter obsessively to see what’s happening. (This was actually my first tweet.). And retweet other pitches.

    More Lessons from #PitMad

    So one thing Kathy does via her live video classes is show the pitches that succeeded in getting likes. This was so helpful and, at least for me, it really seemed to unlock my brain so I could try different pitches.

    Voice seemed key. Mash-ups were also successful. And spacing seemed to help. She also recommended just doing a scene from your novel, and not pitching the entire synopsis in 240 characters.

    She recommends trying different things each time. This way, you can see what, if anything, gets traction with agents. She showed us how one person tweeted three different pitches: one got one heart from an agent, the second received none, and then the third received hearts from three agents. She chose brilliant examples.

    I had one like from an agent on my first pitch. So happy! I also had someone comment that they’ve done that (leave the coat on the chair and the light on), so I loved that too. And someone else commented that they wanted to read this book. My other pitches were not successful, but it was still fun to try.  And then Kathy also complimented me, which also made me so happy.

    Kathy re-posts my pitch that got a heart in Facebook group showing lessons from #pitmad
    And her Facebook post looks so professional.

    It’s also an amazingly supportive community.  I loved that aspect. Some people wrote that they got 500 followers on Twitter. I didn’t concentrate on that part of it, but next time, I might. This time, I was so busy in RL that I just did the classes, worked on my 3 pitches, and tried to comment on other peoples’ pitches on Facebook. It was also my first time really using Twitter (Kathy also shows you how to set up your Twitter account). If you have a Twitter community, that may help if many people retweet your pitches.

    Lessons from #PitMad in RealTime

    I started with my best pitch at 10 a.m.. Here are my three final pitches:

    Pitch 1. Jacket on back of chair. Check.

    Briefcase in view of open door. Check.

    Time to escape the office, but leave the impression she’s still there Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer is sure she can persuade cute fun-loving neighbor that she can balance it all. #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    At around 2 p.m.:

    Pitch 2: How to Intrigue your cute neighbor. What not to do:

    1. Play a practical joke on him making him laugh

    2. Send him welcoming homemade cookies

    3. Invite him over for a home-cooked meal

    4. Leave date abruptly to go to office when boss calls. #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    At around 6 p.m.:

    Pitch 3: WORKING GIRL x LEAN IN

    Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer must persuade rival colleague to work together so both make partner.

    Sent Feminist Fight club in inter-office mail

    Sent MIRACLE ON 34th STREET

    No Reply. Not surprised. Invite to BusDev lunch. And it’s a yes #PITMAD #A #WF #R

    My original three pitches included pitch #1 above and then these two below. After taking Kathy’s class, I changed them to the above final pitches.

    I did question whether I should use my final pitch #3 or draft pitch #3 below.

    Pitch 2: When a conflict-adverse workaholic bumps into her new neighbor on the street (while checking her work phone), they strike up a flirtation. Even if he is the one, after 7 years of working nonstop to make partner, she has to put that goal first. #A #WF #R #PITMAD

    Pitch 3: Conflict-adverse Wall Street lawyer is determined to make partner. She’ll “be nice,” even if her nemesis wonders aloud “if she has what it takes.” But when her 24/7 job sabotages her new love, she must figure out what partnership she wants. #A #WF #R #PITMAD (258)

    Let’s Talk

    Which pitch would entice you to read the book? Have you done #PITMAD? What did you think? What lessons did you learn?

  • Developing Supporting Characters

    So, I’m starting my second novel and developing the supporting characters. I’m also about to take my third Linnea Sinclair month-long class, which will be on secondary characters. So excited! I highly recommend signing up now for it. It’s only $30.00. She is an AMAZING teacher (and writer). So, I will have a lot more insights into this at the end of this month (but you have to take her class for those). But for now, here’s where I’m starting from.

    Only dolls would volunteer to be photographed for a “supporting characters” picture–which leads to some other advice I’ve heard: everyone thinks they’re the MC.

    Use Supporting Characters to Create Conflict and Add Dimension

    The best analysis I’ve seen so far on developing your supporting characters is Billy Mernit’s analysis of the TOOTSIE characters in his book, Writing the Romantic Comedy. And if you are writing a romantic comedy or love watching romantic comedies, I HIGHLY recommend reading his book. He has an amazing pictorial representation of the characters.

    “[T]he supporting characters are all in some way reflections of Michael [Michael is the name of the character who becomes Tootsie] and thus force him to confront his issues.”

    Writing the Romantic Comedy, by Billy Mernit (2000) at p. 76.

    So, as an example, in my current WIP, if my protagonist is going to be emotionally reserved, then another character has to be very emotional. Supporting characters should conflict and bring out different traits in the MC. Here’s an initial circle representation, based on Mernit’s picture for Tootsie.

    pictorial representation of contrasts/conflicts between characters
    Good luck reading my handwriting! Even I can’t read it sometimes 🙂 But you should get the idea.

    (To be honest, I keep going back and forth on whether she will be emotionally reserved. Emotional might be more fun.) In my first not-yet-published novel, Partner Pursuit, Audrey is a workaholic, while Jake, the love interest, is trying to live life to the fullest.

    Add a Friend

    Unless the person is a lonely introvert, then I suggest adding a friend. I always wonder about characters who don’t seem to have any friends. Also, this gives your protagonist someone to confide in. And then the buddy can give advice. As Billy Mernit says, “Buddies move the story forward.” (at p. 68). For example, in OVERBOARD (2018), it is Eva Longoria, the best friend, who suggests to Anna Faris that she should pretend she is his wife and he can work to pay off what he owes her.

    Assign “Tags” to Supporting Characters

    If you have a lot of supporting characters, and I’m reading late at night, tired, I might get lost and confuse them unless you give them a “tag” or dominant impression so that I remember who this character is. Here’s what writing guru Dwight Swain advises:

    “A tag is a label. You hang tags on story people so that your reader can tell one character from another. An impression, dominant or otherwise, is created by the tags a character bears.”

    Techniques of the Selling Writer, Dwight V. Swain, at p. 226.

    This is something I also need to improve in my writing.

    Let’s Talk

    Who are some of your favorite supporting characters? Why? What advice do you give about supporting characters?

    And let’s talk about the topic on everyone’s minds: I am trying to stock up for the coronavirus, but it’s practically impossible. The food seems to be eaten as soon as it comes in. It’s like the opposite of doing laundry–I empty the hamper and do the laundry and yet, it’s full again of dirty clothes. Here, I load up the refrigerator and the cabinets, and yet they’re empty. The only thing I can safely say is that we seem to have enough toilet paper. Hurray for that.

    Wishing everyone a great weekend. Keep washing your hands.

  • Analyzing the new OVERBOARD

    Overboard movie poster

    So OVERBOARD (1987) with Goldie Hawn and Kurt Russell is one of my favorite movies, but I still wanted to see the new OVERBOARD (2018) and to spend some time analyzing it. (It’s free right now on Amazon Prime). And I enjoyed it in the end, but on its own terms. Since I’m writing a romantic comedy, and since I love watching romantic comedies, I also love discussing and analyzing romantic comedies. And there were some interesting lessons.

    Analyzing the New OVERBOARD

    Here are some of mythoughts on the new OVERBOARD:

    • Still like the set-up of the scam
    • Shows how to make an unlikable love interest likable
    • Uses double entendre in comic scenes – based on the scene with the male buddies
    • Missing the chemistry of the original OVERBOARD

    The Comedy Scam

    According to John Truby, “the plan is always a scam in comedy.” So that’s the case in OVERBOARD, since Anna Faris’s character decides to pretend that Eugenio Derbez is her husband. This also brings in the “fake dating” romcom trope, which is one of my favorites. Only, OVERBOARD has a clever twist since only one of them is aware that they are “fake” married.

    P.S. I highly highly recommend John Truby’s course on Comedy. It is one of the best courses on comedy I have taken so far.

    Making an Unlikable Love Interest Likable

    I REALLY disliked Eugenio Derbez’s character initially. He was so so awful. He had to be awful so you sympathize with the Anna Faris character taking advantage of him. So I was impressed with the scriptwriting because I started to like him. BUT am I really that easy? He makes lunch for her and I’m like, okay, I guess you’re a good guy. I guess I am really that easy. His amnesia, though, also allowed the audience to give him a fresh start.

    My Favorite Scene in OVERBOARD

    My favorite scene was actually when Eugenio Derbez was hanging out with the guys and he says: “I don’t think this is my life. I don’t have sex with my wife.”

    The other guy says that the last time he had sex with his wife was 9 months before our daughter was born. And our daughter is now 2. (So there you have the set-up, the joke, and then the topper (and now our daughter is 2).) And that nobody thinks that this is their life.

    Eugenio says that he feels that he should be the guy owning the pool, not building the pool. And all the guys say that they think that.

    So it has the double entendre aspect because you know that this is not Eugenio’s life (and that in his former life, he did have sex all the time and was the guy owning the pool) and that makes that funny. But the conversation also has truth to it (everybody thinks that), which adds to the humor.

    Missing the Chemistry of the Original OVERBOARD

    I think that from a romantic point of view, it was missing the chemistry of the original OVERBOARD. Goldie Hawn and Kurt Russell definitely had more chemistry. Maybe that’s because they have chemistry in real life, but I also think that the OVERBOARD (2018) script had less flirtatious banter between the leads. I’ll have to go watch the original again to see if my theory is correct. 🙂

    I remember that I wrote one scene in my draft novel where the male romantic lead was doing the dishes and my writing tutor in my Penguin UK Constructing a Novel Writer’s Academy course found this boring and said I needed to add more sparks. Meanwhile, as someone who hates doing dishes, I thought that the male romantic lead doing the dishes was sexy. Lol.

    Sexy man doing dishes

    But she was right and I did add more banter to the scene.

    Meme that I want you to want to do the dishes from The Break-Up

    Exactly. Why would anyone want to do the dishes?

    Three Take-Aways from Analyzing the New OVERBOARD

    • Use a scam in your comedy. Add a twist if you can.
    • Make sure there is flirtatious banter between the leads
    • Comic scenes that play with double entendres work.

    Let’s Talk

    Have you seen the 2018 OVERBOARD? Did you like it or hate it? What was your favorite scene? What was your favorite scene in the 1987 OVERBOARD?

  • Black History Month Book Recommendations

    For Black History Month, I thought I’d give some book recommendations of some of my favorite books by black women authors. Many of these are classics, and heart-breaking, but I love them.

    • How It Went Down by Kekla Magoon
    • Brown Girl, Brownstones by Paule Marshall
    • Passing by Nella Larsen
    • Corregidora by Gayle Jones

    Short Summaries of Each Book Rec

    How It Went Down

    How It Went Down is a very quick read, but also heartbreaking. I read it for my book club. “When sixteen-year-old Tariq Johnson dies from two gunshot wounds, his community is thrown into an uproar. Tariq was black. The shooter, Jack Franklin, is white. In the aftermath of Tariq’s death, everyone has something to say, but no two accounts of the events line up. Day by day, new twists further obscure the truth.”

    Corregidora

    Amazon describes Corregidora as the tale of blues singer Ursa, consumed by the hatred of the slave master who fathered both her grandmother and her mother. And that sentence alone gives me chills. I read this in college and still remember it vividly.

    Brown Girl, Brownstones

    I discovered Paule Marshall and absolutely LOVED Brown Girl, Brownstones. Maybe because it was set in New York and because my mom firmly believes in buying a brownstone in NY. I remember waiting anxiously for Marshall’s new releases. I was so excited when Daughters came out.

    Brown Girl, Brownstones is about a Barbadian immigrant family living in Brooklyn. The protagonist is a ten-year old girl who strives to define her own identity “as she struggles to surmount the racism and poverty that surround her.” Her father wants to return to Barbados and her mother is trying to save money to buy a brownstone in Brooklyn.

    Passing

    Passing was published in 1929. (I love books set in the Roaring ’20’s). Set primarily in Harlem, “the story centers on the reunion of two childhood friends—Clare Kendry and Irene Redfield—and their increasing fascination with each other’s lives. The book examines each woman’s approach to passing for white. Irene, who is insecure, seems to envy Clare’s confidence and also resent it.” She fears that Clare has made a dangerous mistake by pretending to be white to her racist husband. (from the Wikipedia summary).

    #TBR Pile for YA Black History Month Book Recommendations

    I have both these books in my #tbr pile as well as The Hate You Give. My daughter recommended One Crazy Summer and the rest of the series.

    One Crazy Summer by Rita Williams-Garcia is “the heartbreaking, funny tale of three girls who travel to Oakland, California in 196 in search of the mother who abandoned them.”

    The Young Landlords by Walter Dean Myers: “They were out to save the world–and were lucky to save their skins.” A bunch of young kids buy a building.

    #TBR for Romance Books

    And on my #TBR for more fun reading: The Proposal by Jasmine Guillory and In Rhythm by JN Welsh.

    The Proposal: “When freelance writer Nikole Paterson goes to a Dodgers game with her actor boyfriend, his man bun, and his bros, the last thing she expects is a scoreboard proposal. Saying no isn’t the hard part—they’ve only been dating for five months, and he can’t even spell her name correctly. The hard part is having to face a stadium full of disappointed fans… At the game with his sister, Carlos Ibarra comes to Nik’s rescue and rushes her away from a camera crew. . . “

    In Rhythm by JN Welsh
    I love the cover too!

    I bought In Rhythm because the protagonist is a female DJ. And she actually falls for a Dutch guy. (I’m half-Dutch). “With a shared passion for music and an intense mutual attraction, the pair should be totally in sync. Instead, Zazzle’s reputation has Velvet hitting Pause.” I just started reading it and I love the way JN Welsh writes. Her dialogue is so realistic. But it does have a content warning that it deals with addiction.

    Let’s Talk

    Do you have any book recommendations?

  • Happy Valentine’s Day 2020!

    Happy Valentine’s Day 2020!

    Yes, these are dolls. My husband refused to model 🙂

    I personally like spending Valentine’s Day reading or watching a good romcom. Although if some attractive guy wants to make me breakfast in bed, I’m all for that too!

    Yummy! Plus all that unruly hair!

    Until I met my husband, I don’t think I ever had a date for Valentine’s Day. It was Galentine’s Day for me. When my daughter was due in February, I was really worried that she’d was going to be born on Valentine’s Day. A friend asked, “Why?” And I said, “I gather you’ve always had a date for Valentine’s Day!” (Thankfully, my daughter was not born on Valentine’s Day.)

    Fallen Chocolate Cake Recipe for a Happy Valentine’s Day

    Fallen chocolate cake in ramekins
    Fallen Chocolate Cakes in Ramekins. Image from FamilyStyleFood (with another recipe I will have to try)

    Here’s my go-to recipe for Valentine’s Day: the fallen chocolate cake from Cooks Illustrated. In my draft MS, my protagonist Audrey makes this for Jake when she wants to impress him with her cooking. He is duly impressed. 🙂

    Ingredients

    8 tablespoons unsalted butter (1 stick), plus extra for ramekins

    8 ounces bittersweet chocolate coarsely chopped;

    4 large eggs plus 1 large egg yolk

    1 teaspoon vanilla extract

    ¼ teaspoon table salt

    ½ cup granulated sugar

    2 tablespoons unbleached all-purpose flour plus extra for ramekins

    Butter and flour (or use cocoa powder) eight 6-ounce ramekins.

    Instructions:

    Melt 8 tablespoons butter and chocolate in medium heatproof bowl set over a pan of almost simmering water, stirring until smooth; remove from heat.

    Beat the eggs, yolk, vanilla, salt, and sugar until the ribbon stage – the color will be pale yellow and the volume is nearly tripled. The mixture will drop from the beaters in a heavy thick ribbon. This usually takes about 10 minutes with the hand held mixer.

    Pour egg mixture over melted chocolate and butter; sprinkle flour over egg mixture. Gently fold egg and flour into chocolate until batter is completely mixed.

    Pour batter into prepared ramekins. (At this stage, you can put them into the fridge for about 8 hours. They’ll need to come back to room temperature [about 30 minutes] before you bake them)

    Bake in a 400 degree preheated oven for about 12 minutes or until the the cakes have risen over the rims. They’re done when they have a thin crust and the center jiggles when you tap ramekins.

    Run a knife around the edges to loosen the cake (didn’t need to do that last night cuz Kellie had buttered so enthusiastically) and invert onto a plate. Let the cake cool for about a minute before removing the ramekin.

    When Adam Met Evie

    When Adam Met Evie
    When Adam Met Evie by Giulia Skye

    And if you’re looking for a fun escape read, my friend Giulia Skye just published her book When Adam Met Evie. Woohoo! We met on the train to the Romantic Novelists Association conference in Leeds several years ago.

    I highly recommend When Adam Met Evie. The characters are very believable and engaging, the story hooks, and the setting is the Australian outback–what more could you ask for?

    Here’s the blurb:

    “When former Olympic Swimmer, Michael Adams—now reluctantly Canada’s hottest reality TV star— insults his fake showbiz wife on social media, he escapes the ensuing scandal and jumps on the first flight to Australia. Desperate to experience ordinary life again—if only for a few weeks—he becomes “Adam”, just another tourist traveling through the Outback. But with a reward out for his safe return and his fame’s nasty habit of catching up with him when he least expects, he needs a disguise… and he’s just found it.

    Sweet and scruffy British backpacker, Evie Blake, is taking a year out of her busy London life. Tired of lies and liars, she’s looking for adventure to heal her broken heart. So when the hot Canadian she meets at the campground offers to be her travel partner through Western Australia’s wild Kimberley region, she grabs the chance, unaware he’s got the world out looking for him. He’s just a down-on-his-luck traveler, right? ” From Goodreads.

    Let’s Talk

    What do you like to do on Valentine’s Day? Do you have any romcom or romance book recommendations? Any recent romcom movies you’d recommend? Happy Valentine’s Day 2020!

  • “Everybody Reads” Week Diorama for Library

    My son’s public school has an “Everybody Reads” week where authors come in to speak to the students, and so I created a library diorama for the library.

    “Everybody Reads” Week Library Diorama

    “Everybody Reads” Week diorama for public school library

    How I made it

    Our local hardware store cut the plywood to my requested size. I made the bookcases out of Balsa wood and matte board.

    I made the books with various miniature book printables from friends and from the internet. L’Eggo Waffles also has a free giveaway of books during the summer for points and the packages pictured many of the kids’ favorite books. I also Xeroxed the copies of some of their favorite books and shrunk them to 1/12 size. I then glued those around foamcore or the edges of magazines.

    The floor is contact paper glued on top of the plywood. I bought the back white bookshelf and the rocking chair on eBay. The librarian usually sits in a rocking chair and reads them a story before the children search for books to take out. The banner is construction paper with handwritten letters on string.

    Close-Up Pictures of the Library Diorama

    Here’s a close-up of the books in the white bookcase on the rear wall.

    For the left side, I made mostly filler books.

    And here’s the right side of the library. It has some favorites like Charlotte’s Web, Dragon Masters, The School for Good and Evil, and of course, Harry Potter.

    The Right Side. Can you find Harry Potter?

    I want to add mini books by the authors who are coming to give book talks, but I didn’t have time this year. I figure each year I can add a few more shelves and favorite books, so it keeps up with the times.

    The kids really love it. They gather around looking at it. It’s fun overhearing them find some of their favorite books in mini, like Harry Potter or the Owl Diaries. I’ve explained how they can make their own mini books. As an example, sometimes even the Scholastic book flyer has pictures of books in the right size.

    Let’s Talk

    What are some of your favorite children’s books?

  • Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius

    Here are my three lessons on crafting internal conflict from Story Genius by Lisa Cron. I just finished reading it and Wow! I highly recommend it.

    Three Lessons on Internal Conflict from Story Genius.

    • “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks our interest and drives the story forward.” (p. 18)
    • Write the “Origin Scene” – the scene in which your protagonist’s misbelief originated– and three Turning Point scenes “where her misbelief was the deciding factor in a decision she made” and which confirms that misbelief as “right.” (p.114)
    • In each scene, what connects that scene to that third rail? What is the “story-specific emotional component to give it meaning and drive it forward?” (p. 247) Why does what happens matter to your protagonist? How is it slowly changing the misbelief?

    Of course, these three lessons are just the tip of the iceberg. Crafting these four scenes made me really focus on my protagonist’s internal conflict and gave me backstory to insert into the novel. It showed me how what’s happening is making her change her “misbelief” and how to tie my scenes more closely to that third rail.

    I started reading Story Genius because I am taking an online class by Linnea Sinclair called “Inside Out: Crafting your Character’s Internal Conflict.” She recommended reading it. This is my second course with Linnea and I highly recommend them: https://www.facebook.com/Linnea-Sinclair-75135631090/. They’re fun and chock full of writing tips for your toolbox. And completely affordable. So much value for your money.

    Now I also have to figure where I am going to input the snippets of backstory that I wrote as part of the Story Genius exercises, without it seeming like a backstory information dump.

    Book Recommendation: Gabriel’s Ghost (RITA winner)

    I also just finished reading Gabriel’s Ghost by Linnea Sinclair (RITA winner, Paranormal Romance) because reading authors is another way to learn the craft. It was my first paranormal romance and it was so good. I highly recommend it, for readers and writers alike. I couldn’t put it down and just bought the next in the series.

    Let’s Talk

    What do you think is a story’s third rail? Do you think it is inner conflict? Have you read Story Genius? And have you read Gabriel’s Ghost? Are there any books you recommend?

  • Three Lessons from The Writing Life

    In the Algonkian novel writing course, which I highly recommend, we had to write book reports and list lessons from each craft book we read, so here are my three lessons from The Writing Life by Annie Dillard:

    • Keep a Journal
    • Put your Good Stuff in Now
    • Writing is Hard.

    I found compelling her advice to put your good stuff in now. And look how she writes it!

    “One of the things I know about writing is this: spend it all, shoot it, play it, lose it, all, right away, every time. Do not hoard what seems good for a later place in the book or for another book; give it, give it all, give it now. The impulse to save something good for a better place later is the signal to spend it now. Something more will arise for later, something better. These things fill from behind, from beneath, like well water. Similarly, the impulse to keep to yourself what you have learned is not only shameful, it is destructive. Anything you do not give freely and abundantly becomes lost to you. You open your safe and find ashes.” 

    The Writing Life by Annie Dillard

    But I will note that if my good stuff doesn’t work in my current manuscript and I have to cut that scene, then I am saving it with the hope that maybe it will fit another manuscript better. And hoping that it doesn’t turn to ashes.

    Kind of similar to giving a cat a bath

    The book also helped me as a writer because it showed me how intense writing can be. I read this in the beginning of the Algonkian novel writing course and then returned it to the library, but what I recall most vividly is her description of flying in the plane with the stunt pilot (and her description of her writing room without any comforts). Her writing is brilliant, but she was also a bit intimidating about the writing process. I actually really enjoy writing.

    Why Three Lessons from The Writing Life by Annie Dillard?

    I like limiting it to three lessons because I find that more manageable, although of course, so many lessons and tips can be learned from each craft book. I also think that different lessons will occur upon re-reading a craft book.

    So, as I read writing craft books, I hope to continue this practice of identifying three lessons learned.

    Thoughts on the Algonkian Novel Writing Course

    As far as the Algonkian novel writing course, I highly highly recommend it, although it is only if you are highly self-motivated to complete it by yourself because it is intense, but there’s no feedback until the end. I learned so much, though, and found the lessons invaluable. Also, for me, it was great that I could complete it at my own pace.

    Questions?

    Have you read The Writing Life? What were your three lessons? What are your thoughts on keeping a journal? If you are a writer, do you sometimes save your good stuff or do you try to use it all in the current WIP?

  • Create More Action and Tension in a Manuscript

    I labeled my scenes action vs. dialogue per my earlier post, so now I think I need to create more action and tension in my manuscript.

    How can I add action when my protagonist is sitting in an office? I can’t invent a space ship or aliens attacking her. (Well, I can, but I’d be in another genre.) She accidently staples her fingers?

    So now I’ve added another antagonist who is metaphorically trying to staple my protagonist. Mwuah hah hah.

    I also turned to my craft books for advice.

    Creating More Action and Tension in a MS Per Dwight Swain

    Dwight Swain’s Advice – Add Feeling, Action, Speech

    I read Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, recommended by Linnea Sinclair and I found what I needed to do.
    1) To add tension, you need to show the character’s reaction to an event.
    2) The character reaction is “feeling, action, speech.” (p. 56).

    My character usually talks in reaction, which made me realize I‘ve been leaving out the feeling and the action. I definitely haven’t been using all the “glandular and muscular reactions” (at p. 72). (Am I really supposed to use glandular reactions? That feels so raw.)

    a. What is feeling? Dwight Swain explains:
    “Panic races through you.
    Panic is feeling.
    Like magic, sweat slicks your palms and soaks your armpits and trickles down your spine. . .
    Actions, one and all.” ( at p. 57) (Also very glandular.)

    Or his example:
    “Hi Jill!” he called. “How’s it going?”
    Feeling: A glow of warmth at his friendliness crept through Jill.
    Action: She smiled.
    Speech: “Just fine, thanks,” she said. ( at p. 58)

    He’s not recommending that you always use all three components, but rather add it to your writer’s toolbox.

    Tension – Internal and External Conflict

    And just as I was thinking about this, this on-topic post from https://nybookeditors.com/2019/05/how-to-raise-the-stakes-in-your-novel-and-create-a-gripping-story/ popped up. They suggest adding internal conflict among several other items on the checklist. I recommend reading article and getting the checklist. My protagonist has external and internal conflict, but I haven’t always highlighted the internal conflict.

    As Lisa Cron writes,

    “[T]he protagonist’s internal struggle is the story’s third rail, the live wire that sparks out interest and drives the story forward.”

    Story Genius, by Lisa Cron at p. 18

    End In Disaster

    I also re-read parts of Jack Bickham’s Scene and Structure, another craft book I also highly recommend.

    “Disaster works (moves the story forward) by seeming to move the central figure further back from his goal, leaving him in worse trouble than he was before the scene started.”

    Scene & Structure by Jack Bickham at p. 42.

    What are your thoughts?

    Do you have any advice on how to create more action and tension in a MS? How do you develop your protagonist’s internal conflict? What kind of books do you like to read?

  • A Matisse Art Lesson for My Son’s Class

    Exhibition Matisse at the Museum of Modern Art in New York – 1992

    Volunteering to Teach an Art Lesson/Project on Matisse

    I thought I’d share my proposed Matisse Art Lesson/Project lesson for my son’s class. My son is in public elementary school, and this year, his school lost its art teacher due to budget cuts. The teacher asked for any parent volunteers to teach an art class. I love modern art (see https://kathystrobos.com/about-me/ ). So I volunteered to teach an art class on Henri Matisse, ending with the kids doing a cut-outs art project, following the Drawing with Scissors art lesson plan. Several other moms also offered to help, so thankfully I won’t be alone.

    It’s only a 50 minute class, so ultimately that’s not that much time. (Or that could be a REALLY REALLY long time if it all goes bottoms up.) I want to do a little bit on Matisse and then let the kids “draw with scissors” to make art imitating Matisse’s Cut-Outs. I am still working on my lesson plan but I thought I’d share it here in case other parents are looking for an art lesson for their kids or for a class. Or in case anyone has any advice.

    It was hard to pick which paintings to show the children as part of the art lesson. As expected, Matisse painted a lot of naked people, so I wanted to find some non-naked drawings. Since Matisse is one of my favorite artists, I bought the Museum of Modern Art Matisse Exhibition book from the retrospective in 1992. I also borrowed Art Book Matisse by Gabrielle Crepaldi from the New York Public Library.

    So here’s the first draft of the lesson plan. I think we can spend 15 -20 minutes on the art history and then have 30 minutes for the art project.

    Art Lesson on Matisse the Artist

    Matisse was born in northern France in 1869. He trained to be a lawyer but took up painting while recovering from appendicitis.

    He went to Paris to study art at the Academie Julian and he apprenticed to another painter Gustave Moreau.

    This picture from Drawing with Scissors shows one of his first paintings (a stack of books). It also shows one of his last pictures, so you can see the evolution in style.

    Shows the evolution of his art from one of his first paintings to one of his last works of art
    From Drawing with Scissors by Keesia Johnson and Jane O’Connor, illustrated by Jessie Hartland

    Fauvism

    In 1905, there was a radical change in his work. While in the South of France, he began to paint with bright, clashing colors. “Honor every color without sacrificing a single one,” wrote Matisse.

    This style was eventually called Fauvism, after a critic called Matisse and other artists painting in this manner “fauves”, which in French means “wild beasts.”

    Here’s one painting showing this new painting style.

    The Roofs of Collioure by H. Matisse (summer-autumn 1905)

    Matisse said that Fauvism was construction by means of color. He said that the art should convey the artist’s response to his subject. What do you think Matisse was feeling when he painted the above? Why? (If no one answers, I would say happy because he used bright colors.)

    Matisse’s painting style continued to change, but he always remained true to bold color.

    The Influences of Travel and Geometry in Matisse’s Work

    Matisse traveled a lot and he was influenced by his travels to those different areas/countries (Russia, Morocco, and Asia).

    Another element to look for in his paintings is Geometry (he has lots of shapes) and Nature. Let’s look at some of his paintings and see whether we can identify any geometric or nature elements.

    Harmony in Red by H. Matisse in 1908

    What do you notice about this painting? There’s part of a rectangle (a geometric element). And there are a lot of decorative elements; it looks like there are vines crawling all around the room. The red is also very intense. It looks like there is a table but it almost flat. An interesting fact is that the large canvas was initially painted in green and the painting was called Harmony in Green. Then Matisse painted over it in blue and called it Harmony in Blue. An art collector bought it. Then Matisse changed his mind again, before delivering it, and re-painted it red. (See Art Book Matisse by Gabriele Crepaldi (Dorling Kindersley) at p. 60).

    Goldfish by Matisse 1911

    What do you notice about this painting? I see a lot of circular shapes. Also plants (nature) and again bright colors. What do you feel when you see this painting? It’s one of my favorites.

    The Piano Lesson by H. Matisse 1916

    What do you see in this painting? I see a lot of triangles. The metronome is echoed in the boy’s face and the window. Also compare this to Harmony in Red – what is similar again? The swirls in the ironwork of the window remind me of the vines in Harmony in Red.

    As an aside for adults, according to the Matisse Art Book, “critics have read symbolic significance into the scene, identifying the opposing elements of the creative process with emotional, irrational intuition on one side, and on the other side, deliberate rationality.” (Art Book Matisse by Gabriele Crepaldi, at p. 79). I can see that in the art sculpture in the lower left hand corner versus the woman sitting stiffly in the upper right background. It’s the tick of the metronome versus the expressive music emerging from the piano in the black swirls.

    Matisse’s Cut-Outs

    Exhibition Matisse (Henri Matisse: A Retrospective, The Museum of Modern Art, New York, at p. 412

    In 1946, Matisse was nearly 80 years old, and painting and carving sculptures had become increasingly difficult for him. He found a new opportunity for expression in making cutouts. Let’s read Matisse’s Garden. (It depends on time if I can read this to them, but I read it to my children as practice and they were inspired to make the cut-out art after listening, so it seemed effective.)

    Matisse’s Garden by Samantha Friedman, Illustrations by Cristina Amodea

    Drawing with Scissors Art Lesson

    I found this amazing book, Drawing with Scissors, with a free art project lesson plan (http://creativityconnection.fabercastell.com/henri-matisse-art-lesson/ ) (available at Amazon: https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/044842519X/ref=ppx_yo_dt_b_asin_title_o01_s00?ie=UTF8&psc=1). So we will then follow the art project lesson plan (although it recommends 2 45-minute classes). My children wanted to use pencils and I told them they had to use scissors to draw.

    The Museum of Modern Art also includes a section on Matisse in its Family Guide. I am going to include their advice for arranging the shapes in my Matisse art lesson for my son’s class. See https://www.moma.org/momaorg/shared/pdfs/docs/learn/Education_FamilyGuide_Singles.pdf On page 18, they advise finding Matisse’s The Swimming Pool. Then they ask kids to rip out shapes and arrange them on the next page. “Experiment with placing your shapes close together, far apart, overlapping, and in different directions.” (at p. 19). There’s also this cool video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-rke7RmxwfY by the MoMA.

    So anyway, we will see if this works or if it all looks like the contents of the recycling bin, as one mom said. Lol.

    Any advice on creating a Matisse art lesson for my son’s elementary school class? Are there any artists that you like that are good for elementary school classes? Who are your favorite artists?

    Update: The kids loved it. And the art looked amazing! The teacher allowed them to do it again during their free time on Friday. Also I highly recommend using the craft pattern scissors available at craft stores or on Amazon as well as regular scissors.